Oh shit who's in there D:

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Parallel Dementia. It is a webcomic.

I feel sorry for Mr. Jackalope...

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Nice rabbit boy.

Wow, wicked job with this! It makes total sense and I really love how you've done this, it definitely flows very well and your drawings have the perfect amount of information. Can't wait to see more!

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Whoa crap, now this is sheer awesome on the cob

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Cool.

I think I already see an improvement in comparison to your first try.

I especially like pages 6 to 11.

6 to 8, because it works really good to convey the feeling of silence with just a little disturbance.

And even though pages 9 and 10 only take half of the space it works, because it fits to the limited view he got under the truck and gives a kind of horror movie feeling, including a short lived relieve of tension when he gets up and the panel takes more vertical space, which breaks the feeling of enclosure of the previous two panels.

13 and 14 are lacking a bit of content on the right side. I mean, there is enough happening of the pages, but they are.. well not balanced.
Maybe you should have put the panel a bit more to the center.
Oh god, I hope I don't sound too stupid...

If you had put the speech bubble on page 15 more to the lower left, it would have been right where he is looking on page 16. I think that would have fit a tiny bit better.

The last page is awesome, too.
The panel is far to the right, but it works out, because there is that mysterious voice in the darkness, so its not empty space, but the reader thinks that there is something, even though we can't see it. (even more if the bubble would have been more to the left)

The little "...to be continued" helps, too. ^^

Works pretty well for what you have going. Look forward to the rest

... Stowaway? 8o

...... Tommy? 8D

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